vox nihili

Now, for the review. :) "...before his legs started to liquidate." I think you meant liquify. In the second paragraph, where you mention Charlie and Phil talking as they dig ...

I love this poem. Wow, it's just amazing. Maybe I like it because I've been broken. Anyway, about your poem. "Bone by bone, tendon by tendon, muscle by muscle." I ...

Meh, we're poets, don't worry over sanity too much. (Otherwise you might well go insane from the stress of worrying over being insane) ;) Besides, sanity is a relative concept. ...

This is pretty profound. You describe an unpleasant state of mind so poetically and specifically, yet still preserve the drifting, homeless vibe. From the beginning, when you go in a ...

So, firstly, I haven't read the other chapters. (yet.) But, this seems pretty good, even standalone. I like Delem's tone, and your structure. It's very flowing and natural, and you ...

This sounds pretty good, so far. Try to go a little more indepth, though. I'd love to feel more of what the character, Chloe, is feeling, thinking, more on her ...

First impressions: It different from most love poetry I've seen. Others tend to go all either "I hate him ex" or "I can't live without him" , and that tends ...

This is amazing. For one, I don't tend to see too many stories on romance-y topics from a guy's point of view. Second, the whole idea, of a brother being ...

This is amazing. I'm glad you're able to voice what's going on inside you through this, you definitely made it haunting. I'm not sure what a few of the lines ...

You should use age, not aged, eighteen is one word, no hyphen (etc) Big tip: proofread. Especially when you're going to turn something in for a college assignment, proofread. Also, ...

I like it. I think I prefer the first, as some of the rhymes, well, I don't know. Rhyme without meter is more difficult to appreciate, not to criticize your ...

Wow. This is amazing. I love poetry that's abstract like this (if that's the right term for it, I guess I'm thinking abstract like artwork). You pull it off much ...

This is amazing! I love the candid descriptions, idiosyncratic characters, Fischer mostly, and the mysterious, hard-eyed girl who shows up. Fears of rabid rats puts the horror on with a ...

It does have an interesting premise, I agree, but there are some major flaws that make it an overwhelming read. It's hard to concentrate on enjoying the plot for the ...

Overall impression: pretty good! I like the imagery and the language is something along the lines of haunting. Criticisms: Line 4 of the first stanza doesn't make sense. Its syntax ...